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Title: Back Story Mercinary Tier
Post by: graylobo on October 29, 2013, 06:04:29 PM
Mercenary Tier
Name: Jonathan Craig (Short: Jon Craig) alternately just ( Jon )

Childhood (Son of a Huntess
In the harsh but plentiful mountains of Ticonderoga Jon was the old fashioned way. His mother empathized on trapping, tracking, shooting, cooking, and Mountain Medicine.

    Construction - 0
    Growing - 0
    Research - 0
    Mining - 0
    Shooting - 3(+3)
    Melee - 0
    Social - 0
    Cooking - 1(+1)
    Medicine - 1(+1)
    Artistic - 0
    Crafting 2(+2)

total childhood points 6

Adulthood (Mountain Man)
Now a man and a professional hunter, Jon sought more challenging game and felt it time to leave. He saved up some Imperials and bought a shuttle ticket to a new world filled with exotic game.

    Construction - 0
    Growing - 0
    Research - 0
    Mining - 0
    Shooting - 8(+5)
    Melee - 0
    Social - 0
    Cooking - 2(+1)
    Medicine - 3(+2)
    Artistic - 0
    Crafting 4(+2)

total adulthood points 10

I don't know if we can request fiscal characteristic but can my charter have a beard and tash?
Thanks in advance for looking it over when you have a moment.

    Serenely,
     Graylobo
p.s. Thanks to kelfka for the assist on my personal  NPC.
Title: Re: Back Story Mercinary Tier
Post by: Kelfka on October 29, 2013, 09:00:36 PM
My humble opinion. I tried to cut as much words as possible so you can add more info.
Childhood (Son of a Hunter huntress)
In the harsh and plentiful mountains of [insert name here] Jon was raised by his parents the old fashioned way. Learning to set traps, track,shooting was empathized highly by mother, tend wounds if incurred, and cook as well. His mother empathized on trapping, tracking, shooting, cooking and healing. The mountains of his youth where harsh but giving.

I went from 40 words to about 25. Still plenty of space to add info.

Adulthood (Mountain Man)
Furthering in the skills taught by Mother and Father Jon started to to grow board by the same game year after year, season after season. Now a man and a professional hunter, Jon wanted more that the familiar game and felt he had to leave. As he came to manhood and time to leave home he knew this was not the mountain for him. He saved up some Imperials [Coins?] from his surplus meats and furs and bought a ticket to the big city, and from there for a shuttle ticket to a new world filled with exotic games.

There is a limit of 50 words per section childhood and adulthood.
I went from 73 words to 41.

Hope it helps
Title: Re: Back Story Mercinary Tier
Post by: graylobo on October 30, 2013, 04:16:06 AM
Quote from: Kelfka on October 29, 2013, 09:00:36 PM
My humble opinion. I tried to cut as much words as possible so you can add more info.
Childhood (Son of a Hunter huntress)
In the harsh and plentiful mountains of [insert name here] Jon was raised by his parents the old fashioned way. Learning to set traps, track,shooting was empathized highly by mother, tend wounds if incurred, and cook as well. His mother empathized on trapping, tracking, shooting, cooking and healing. The mountains of his youth where harsh but giving.

I went from 40 words to about 25. Still plenty of space to add info.

Adulthood (Mountain Man)
Furthering in the skills taught by Mother and Father Jon started to to grow board by the same game year after year, season after season. Now a man and a professional hunter, Jon wanted more that the familiar game and felt he had to leave. As he came to manhood and time to leave home he knew this was not the mountain for him. He saved up some Imperials [Coins?] from his surplus meats and furs and bought a ticket to the big city, and from there for a shuttle ticket to a new world filled with exotic games.

There is a limit of 50 words per section childhood and adulthood.
I went from 73 words to 41.

Hope it helps

O yea i did forget that bit thanks a lot ^^ will edit now.