Angel's Wing - Commentary

BeastNips · April 05, 2017, 01:18:20 PM

Hi Everyone!

I'm currently writing some fan-fiction called "Angel's Wing". I'm replying to the thread to add the instalments so obviously I don't really want anyone commenting as it will break the immersion. I thought I'd make this topic if anyone wants to give me any feedback, suggest possible directions the story could go in etc.

Thanks for reading guys!

Thread can be found here: https://ludeon.com/forums/index.php?topic=31496.0

Barazen · April 05, 2017, 07:35:30 PM

So far so good friend, i shall hold my criticism till a bit later i think, i'm curious to see where you go with this

ArguedPiano · April 06, 2017, 09:43:14 AM

Stumbled across this and I've enjoyed it. I look forward to reading more!

BeastNips · April 06, 2017, 03:47:41 PM

Thanks guys. I'll try to write the next installment tomorrow.

BeastNips · April 13, 2017, 08:34:32 AM

Sorry it's been so long! I've just got a new job so it hasn't left me with a lot of time to write. The next installment is up. It's kind of an explanation installment so not the fastest paced, but stay with me! Excitement is coming...

ArguedPiano · April 14, 2017, 09:35:13 PM

No worries. I've enjoyed it so far! The hook at the end of each installment keeps me wanting more

BeastNips · April 19, 2017, 05:22:34 AM

Next installment is up! Enjoy.

BeastNips · April 20, 2017, 06:15:48 AM

Next one is up! Two more to go until the end of this chapter...

BeastNips · April 21, 2017, 06:09:02 AM

The final installment and the chapter prologue are now both up. If you've managed to stick with it, thank you for reading. I'd appreciate any and all criticism; I can take it, so let me have it!

If you've enjoyed Angel's Wing then please let me know. If feedback seems positive I'll begin the next chapter: Journey's End.

Slimy_Slider · April 21, 2017, 06:18:11 PM

This is great. I love the story and am waiting for the next instalment.
Keep writing please!

ArguedPiano · April 22, 2017, 02:50:07 PM

Agreed ^

The story telling is creative. I like the change of perspective with each installment. If you were to write more I would certainly enjoy reading.

Barazen · April 23, 2017, 10:13:45 PM

Mate, you have given me a good read, and i gotta say I'm waiting with baited breath for the sequel.

This must be shared with Tynan, he should enjoy the read!

BeastNips · April 24, 2017, 02:43:40 AM

Quote from: Barazen on April 23, 2017, 10:13:45 PM
Mate, you have given me a good read, and i gotta say I'm waiting with baited breath for the sequel.

This must be shared with Tynan, he should enjoy the read!

Feel free. I have no idea how to share things I'm afraid; making things bold and underlined is about the extent of my forum knowledge ha

I'm glad you all like it. I think I have something in mind for the first installment of Journey's End so I'll write it today if I get a chance. I may have to change the style in some installments to conventional descriptive narration; how would you guys feel about that? I'll try to limit it to just occasionally as it's not the style I'm going for.

ArguedPiano · April 24, 2017, 10:21:38 AM

Whatever your creative heart feels I say go for it!

milon · April 24, 2017, 02:52:54 PM

Bravo! That was really good!

Honestly, I thought that Angel's Wing was going to be another colony story, or maybe a succession game since I also noticed this thread. But I went to the other one first and didn't realize until after I posted that you wanted to keep it clean. Would you mind editing that into the 1st post in the story thread?