Rimworld Book?

[boates]

Hello, I am writing a Rimworld book about a pirate woman named Tattana "Taya" as she calls herself.
She lands on a planet named Onhea as part of her Pirate Party.
She is saving money to buy her sister out of the slave trade and using the money she gets from pirating to pay her sister out.
Would be curious if anyone would be interested in giving me feedback about this Rimworld Story, I am currently on chapter 18 so there's plenty more if people want to see it.

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[EnricoDandolo]

That was a good read.
But if your reading it as an outsider, someone who doesn't play the Rim world game I feel like there'd be a little bit of an issue, or heck, someone who doesn't know about guns. For example, PDW is a general term, If I was reading it and had no idea about guns I'd have no idea what that was. Also the lady with the sniper rifle, try to use adjectives to describe the guns themselves, don't tell us the model but give us an idea of what the model might be. For example, describe the sniper rifle as Sleek, Powerful,  Long, and covered with leaves. This would give someone the idea that its a stealth weapon, and describe the PDW as compact, Small, fast-firing, etc.
Also about the part where she talks about her sister being a slave in a mid world, describe what the mid world is, if there's only one of them, etc.
TLDR
If someone who doesn't know what most of the gun terms are, or doesn't play Rim world and doesn't understand what a Mid world, Drop-pod, Rim world, or etc is, you should give them a brief explanation of it, or use adjectives to describe them in a few words.

I've no experience with writing books, or stories, but I hope some of these Rim world-Specific Vocabulary and Gun Terms are later explained in the story so that a wide audience of people can understand what they are.
Good luck on your book, overall I'd say the first chapter does a good job of introducing the story, I'd just like for it to have a little more information about select vocabulary.

[boates]

Thank you for the read, I was actually going to change the name of the PDW but forgot.

[homemdosgalos]

It was pretty entertaining, i'm writing some content myself (not Rimworld based though), and this is actually entertaining to read.

While some terms could benefit some explanation, you can simply make a glossary at the beggining / end of the chapter (or book, if you're trying to make one), with a short explanation.